o, masz swój styl, to dobrze
nie będę nic psuł.

https://youtu.be/xokJyITQlrI
Nie wiem, czy Ci się spodoba, mi bardzo, a Twój wiersz, wrócę, ale jest ok.

Sometimes, just drifting
In this simple world
Like a country stream,
Asleep to discussion
(the numbness of content)
I see you smile drifting.
Like a country stream,
My little girl,
Precious and pure
As I fall back,
Into softness and sleep
You Caresse me with simple love
You possess me with
Simple love.
A Caresse is just a touch,
And you touched my heart, and now that we're together
You and I will never part.
You Caresse me with simple love,
You possess me with simple love,
Place becomes time
Space becomes mine
And all ways,
Like this robe,
Green like a country dream
You surround me, and cover me
Protect me and Caresse me
With that special simple love,
Sometimes, just drifting,
Like a country stream
Precious and pure,
I see you smile
Asleep to discussion
Of this…

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